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Our tour took place on the last day of our vacation, right after we enjoyed an amazing Foo Fighters concert — definitely a highlight of our trip! We booked this tour because I’m interested in learning about the history of Indonesia and its people. Our guide, Sheria, was incredibly knowledgeable and well-versed. She speaks excellent English and is a local Indonesian, which made the experience even more authentic.
During the tour, we visited East Indonesia, the National Monument, a batik shop, a mosque, and a church. I’m truly grateful that I chose Sheria as our guide and Ben as our driver — both were very kind and attentive throughout the day.
Looking forward to our next adventure!
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